Is the beginning of my (revised) story any good :)?

Oh no! the last sentence is cut off:( good story. In the beginning, I like how her mind just wanders from one thing to another. I'm jealous... her high school cles were only 45 minutes each, my cles were an hour and 15 minutes each... well it really good, but the part where you wrote "our father" it made it sound like you and your mom have the same father. Instead put "my father." I actually did like it, usually I can't get past the first couple sentences in the questions asking "Is my story good?" But this one get 2 thumbs up:)